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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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while
Suggestion
While
 most of the museums have imposed
entry
 fees for the tourists, few of them still offers free
entry
.
Although
 charging the
entry
fee
 would cause the benefits of excellent maintenance of
such
 facilities, it would badly hurt the overall economy and
hence
 I firmly believe that advantages of putting a price on museum
entry
 do not outweigh its disadvantages. The obvious positive development of implementing the
entrance
fee
 is effective maintenance of
such
 valuable facilities. As it is critical to take care of these public properties with limitations of funds. In
this
 case, charging the
entrance
fee
 would generate funds so that these museums can finance themselves for proper look after.
For instance
, as per survey conducted by a
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 website, The Central Museum in London with paid
entry
 is top rated against those where
entry
 is free. The major drawback of
this
 practice would be in the form of a substantial economic loss to the country because it would limit the number of visitors.
Such
 admission fees to the iconic places like museums discourages people to visit those places and
hence
 the local business would
suffers
Suggestion
suffer
 and ultimately would
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the overall economy.
For example
, the number of tourists reduced by 65% when
Lahore fort museum
Suggestion
the Lahore fort museum
 applied tickets to the
entrance
. For
this
 reason, admission
fee
 is for sure causing more harm than any good. To conclude,
in contrast
 to some paid
entrance
 to the museums, others offer pay less
entry
. Despite
apparent advantages
Suggestion
the apparent advantages
 of
this
 phenomenon
such
 as better care, I am clearly in the
favor
promote over another
favour
father
 of the idea that they cannot outweigh the negative effects like financial loss to the local market.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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