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Some people think the media should not report details of crime to the public. What extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, there has been an overriding concern over the trend of detailed reports of crimes in mass media. Many people assert that the news media should refrain from revealing details of crimes. In my view, I can not agree with
this
 opinion anymore. On the one hand, it is undeniable that giving detailed information about crimes has benefits and it is advisable to discrete and discourage
this
 practice.
Firstly
, they will realize criminal activities and stay away from it. If they do not comply with the rule, they will face to a heavy fine depending on each situation or even many years in prison.
Secondly
, members of the public can gain valuable information about the case leading to commit a crime or the place where illegal activities are rampant,
therefore
, they will be more conscious of their own safety and try to avoid being the
next
 victim.
For example
, people tend to avoid going to an area if they knew robberies and stealing frequently occurred there. Despite the advantages aforementioned above, complete accounts of criminal acts has some drawbacks. The chief reason of it is detailed reports of heinous crime may permanently traumatize the psychology of victims. Without the suffer’s consent, glaringly vivid and graphic accounts of flagitious crimes may constitute recurring nightmares to the individuals who have been victimised by these crimes.
Besides
, media will provide very instructive learning materials for criminals,
thus
 alert them to what the police know and do not know.
This
 could allow the law-breaker to adjust his/her behaviour and avoid detection or capture. Bank robbery in Viet Nam
last
 year was a case in point. By learning material about previous illegal actions via the Internet, bank robbers successfully carried out the robbery and cause serious damage to the country's finances. In conclusion,
although
 crime reports in detail have some advantages, I believe that its drawbacks overweigh its benefits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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