IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In 1970, about a quarter of the household
expenses
Use synonyms
 were spent
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 mortgages,
where as
Correct your spelling
whereas
show examples
 It was doubled and half of all
expenses
Use synonyms
 in 2004. The family spent 1% of
income
Correct pronoun usage
its income
show examples
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
 child care in 1970
however
Linking Words
, It was
raising
Wrong verb form
raised
show examples
as
Change preposition
to
show examples
 10% of their income in 2004. There is
a
Change the article
an
show examples
 unchanged data that was observed
Use synonyms
expenses
Change preposition
on expenses
show examples
 of entertainment in both years. The
expenses
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 food and transport were decreasing percentage with respect to 25% to 12% and 13% to 5% from 1970 to 2004

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Add more linking words.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: