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In the future, nobody will buy printed books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The number of
people
 who read
books
 online has been increasing.
This
 trend causes a new problem that a lot of
people
 enjoy without paying, and some
people
 predict that nobody will buy paper
books
 in the near future because of
this
.
This
 essay will provide the author's opinion on
this
 statement. First of all,
this
 essay needs to make a distinction between reading e-
books
 after we paid and reading them without paying. The former doesn't have any problems.
However
, I think that the latter is kind of problematic. Indeed, if we had free access to a great deal of information
that is
 written in
books
, that would be extremely helpful for some
people
such
 as students who don't have enough money to get a lot of
books
.
However
, I would say that it is disrespectful to authors who wrote the works to read them for free. Of course, compared to printed
books
, it costs less money to publish them, but it must take a lot of time to convert their various ideas into a beautiful work.
Thus
, I think even if it's online
books
, we must pay for the time they spend on writing them. In terms of a legal perspective, each work will have its own copyright.
Therefore
, if we get access to
books
 without any payments or permissions, that will violate their rights. When we consider the issue of copyrights, the age when we can enjoy
books
 online for free will never come. In
this
 sense, I strongly disagree with the ideas mentioned in the first paragraph.
To sum up
,
although
 some
people
 believe that we can read
books
 online for free in the future and no one will buy paper
books
, the dream will never come true from the viewpoints of showing our respect to writers and an issue of copyrights.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples or evidence to support your points. Mention particular statistics, case studies, or expert opinions to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Consider using more connecting phrases or transition sentences to improve the flow and linkage between ideas.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The main points are relevant and logical, making a strong argument against the idea presented in the prompt.
task achievement
The writer provides a thought-provoking standpoint on respecting authors and the legal perspective, which adds depth to the response.

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