Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Gifting young people

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a controversial issue, in the society across the globe. While some purportedly believe that money is the most essential form of appreciating

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this group

these groups

of people, others

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in my opinion, it would be ideal to ascertain the needs of these teenagers before attempting to

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them with any of our preferred choices.

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with, gifting teens with financial resources, enable them to make their preferred choices of what is their utmost need.

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is because, teenagers nowadays have strange desires with varied priorities, coupled with their constant quest to adapt and embrace their new stage of life. An

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be a cousin of mine, who was over the moon with excitement, on receiving a cash

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from

his father on his birthday

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spring. According to him, that was his best birthday

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, as he had intended to purchase a specific roller skate, devoid of his parent’s influence.

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, money could trigger some level of negative indulgent amongst youths.

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is easily seen in cases of random and irrational spending habits in teenagers who have been exposed to financial gifting.

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invariable

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result

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constant request for

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assistance, failure of which makes them indulge in unlawful

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activities, thereby

constituting menace to the community and

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the nation

at large.

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, a popular television network once broadcasted, of a young adult indulged in robbing a grocery store. On his arrest

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, he mentioned

his father’s refusal to honour his request for financial assistance, which he would use in maintaining his perceived status in school. In my opinion, knowing the need of youngsters would go a long way in empowering them adequately in understanding and differentiating the most important things of life and what should be ideal.

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can be achieved through a having a

more closer

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closer

relationship with the teens. To conclude, money as the most suitable

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for

a teen helps them make their own decision on how to spend it but could trigger some unwanted behave in them. I,

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believe that educational empowerment is the key to every young person

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

353 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial responsibility
budget
save
informed spending decisions
personal preferences
practical and efficient
unwanted or inappropriate gifts
impersonal
emotional value
thoughtfulness
personal consideration
wise financial decisions
frivolously
lasting memories and experiences
educational courses
hobby-related equipment
long-lasting positive impact
fostering interests and skills

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Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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