Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Wealth, opulence can empower people to assist and empower others in society, as believed by some. Money is an invaluable resource and it can be used for humanitarian causes and there exists some which
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exist. I believe that there are other aspects of being wealthy that take centre stage and helping others is not the most important thing
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is inextricably linked to the societal rules and pressures of being rich and maintaining a stature in society. Another profound example would be the sustenance and growth of their wealth and assets to support existing and future generations. The ‘upper sections’ of the society seem to be competing in an invisible race where the primary objective is to out-do the others and
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campaigns. Dr. Manmohan Singh, the former prime minister of India, pro-actively contributes towards relief programs for disaster affected group in various parts of the country. Citations of the above examples shows that a part of the wealthy community is genuinely invested in humanitarian causes. There are ample examples of people belonging to both the
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the dichotomy of mind sets is why I believe that helping others is not the most important thing about being rich.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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