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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is clear that living in a foreign
country
 has its own benefits and drawbacks to consider I
agre
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
agreed
agrees
 with
this
 statement,
however I
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however, I
 think that anybody corning in
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 counts should respect national
culture
. In
this
 essay, I would like to outline the social and practical problems. The social problems would be
language barrier
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a language barrier
the language barrier
, which means that a
person
 coming from another
country
 might not be able to speak and understand the
language
 which might be a problem as far a
person
 who is living in a
country
, and a
person
 who came in the
country
. Another problem is linked to the
language
 barrier, but it might influence the behaviour of others. An individual who
come
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comes
 into the
country
 might offend others with their behaviour or
language
.
For example
; some cultures like English people prefer to be very polite and say things differe•tly from other cultures.
Therefore
 a
person
 who doesn't
now
be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
 how to behave in a particular
culture
 might offend others around him. The practical problems would
be misunderstanding of
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be a misunderstanding of
culture
. That means that a
person
 who visits other countries dots not understand
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
 and he behaves as he wants to. The
second
 practical problem is finding a job. An individual who works in
foreign
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a foreign country
country
 might not be appropriate for people who he serves.
For
example if
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example, if
 an individual works in a restaurant, the people who live in a
country
 and they were born in that
country
 might not respect and not like the behaviour of a
person
 who works in a restaurant, it might be because, the cultures are different. To summarize, it can be said that there
are
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is
 a lot of misconceptions which
.
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eople
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People
Apple
Eople
 have when they come in a foreign
country
, and in my opinion and from my personal
experence
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
experienced
experiences
 people should educate, themselves in order to now now to behave in different situations with different cultures.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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