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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Nowadays, it is unacceptable that focus on one carrier on their future. So, people who are all having multiple knowledge and update their skills daily basis those can manage in the current fastest world. The following essay will explain that why we need to have multi level skills. It is the fact that in the old days, people are very honest and what they have focused their jobs and they have more concentrated on their own until they get retired.
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, past generation were enjoying their work and most of them got the Government jobs easily without any competitions.
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, now current generation is very pathetic to get a job in order to the huge population of most of the countries,
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, people are getting knowledge on multiple technologies to become a good leader.
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, company CEO has to get multiple skill sets on varying sectors
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 as finance, manufacturing, sales and distribution apparel in order to handle company.
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, it is undeniable that continues education is an essential thing these days. Whoever those are not updating their knowledge, they will get suffer lot to survey in current world.
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, people who work in the Information technology sector should update themselves with the latest type of antivirus software, since many new viruses which are threatening the networks these days.
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, those who fail to update their software will face serious problems in their database. In conclusion, I personally believe that having different types of works in life is a positive thing and bring a lot of benefits to the person's career, and it is important for people to study or learn throughout their life as the world never stop to develop.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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