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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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It is inevitably true that
Environment
 has been damaged since a long time with human actions causing adverse effects to the individuals. Cities have huge implications that only big industries and factories cause more damage rather than surrounding issues. Is our
environment
 damaging only due to big industries? Well, let's look into the some of the paramount effects leading to dangerous effects.
Firstly
, the main important problem affecting our
environment
 is "Pollution"
.
Accept space
.
 The pollution coming from many ways like traffic, vehicles, sound, etc. In fact, Sound and vehicle pollution has been raising day to day having to release pollutant gases into the atmosphere which in turn causing depletion of the ozone layer leads to the greenhouse effect.
Moreover
, these dangerous gases in the atmosphere cause many severe diseases to people.
For example
, In 2008, 50 children died due to severe diseases which are caused by the surroundings. The Government has to take some measures to control the pollution and as an individual responsibility to take control and save the
environment
.
Secondly
, the another crucial point to discuss is deforestation
ie
Suggestion
IE
is
., cutting down trees and digging the lands for human uses effecting the mother nature and many animals in the forest.
In addition
, deforestation is
also
 a main reason for housing purposes as the population is increasing there is a narrow line of the lands.
For instance
- recently, the biggest Nallamala forest in India has been deforesting for uranium mining purposes and after many disputes over the issue the higher authorities stopped the digging and took action to protect the
environment
. The issue has been raised and shared all over by the public through social media, which went viral and had huge changes in the conditions.
Likewise
, individuals play a vital role in protecting the
environment
. To conclude, there are many ways to protect and save the
environment
 as aforementioned and it is the responsibility of the Government and every citizen to take part in
such
 actions making our
environment
 crisp, clean and green.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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