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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered area of the world should be opened up to access more resourced. To what extent do you agree?

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With an enormous rise in the world population, demand for resources
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 as oil and gas has
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 increased tremendously. Some people are coming up with a thought of excavation of the undiscovered resource areas around the globe for meeting up the increased demand. I strongly disagree with
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 notion because of the environmental risk it possesses and considering the various sustainable
energy
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 resources available. The main reason why discovering of new areas of resourced should be discouraged is the detrimental effects these resourced have on our
environment
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. Combustion of fossil fuels emits harmful gases like carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide that are the major causes of global warming.
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, drilling the earth’s surface for locating oil and gas can significantly damage the underground stability and can
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 cause drying of underground water causing
desertification
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. In fact, the discovery of
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 resources
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 leads to loss of human lives.
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, China, which produces more than one-
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 of annual global coal products, accounts for more than two-thirds of mining deaths around the world each year.
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, considering the renewable sources of
energy
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 has become important nowadays. The alternative sources of
energy
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 like, solar
energy
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, tidal
energy
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 and wind
energy
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 are not only in abundance, but
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 pose no harmful effects on our
environment
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. Now it is high time to reduce our reliance on fossil fuels and resort to using greener sources of
energy
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. These
energy
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 sources are cleaner and sustainable, and can be used in any area.
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, India’s Cochin airport has become the
first
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 airport in the world to function completely on solar
energy
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. To conclude, excavation of unexplored areas to meet the increased demand of
energy
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 should be discouraged because of their limited availability and harmful effects on the
environment
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.
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, it is vital to harness renewable
energy
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 sources, available in abundance, to meet our demands and it can considerably reduce the damage to our
environment
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.
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