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Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons? What are the positive and negative aspects?

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Globalization has
wide
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 impact on all the
countries
 of the world and has brought
people
 closer across the globe.
Therefore
, similarity in
culture
 is being observed in different nations. There are various reasons
of
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this
 phenomenon and it has both positive and negative effects. The main reason
of
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this
 is globalization
due to
 which
now
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people
 are more connected to each other.
In other words
, more and more
people
 are now visiting different
countries
 for their trade
while
their
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 stay
in
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foreign, they adopt their
culture
 to adapt to the new environment and bring it back to their home country.
In addition
, nowadays different exchange cultural programs are
also
 initiated by the government, there, selected delegates of a nation represent their
culture
 and gain some knowledge from other cultures
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also
. These events, assist in coordination and cooperation among different
countries
 and provide them a platform to work on a universal level because there are some issues which
needs
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 to be addressed globally
such
 as the environment. Uni-
culture
, on the one hand, has some advantages. Every
culture
 has something new to offer,
for example
, in some Asian
countries
, Ayurveda is immensely popular and through these cultural programs, other
western
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countries
 can
also
be benefited
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 by understanding and learning it.
On the other hand
, similar
culture
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cultures
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 around the world
has
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 some drawbacks
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also
. One
such
 negative impact of it is
people
 are adapting to a new
culture
 which seems more fascinating to them
initially
 and getting away from their own roots. By
this
 practice, eventually, some cultures will be forgotten, which will be a huge loss to the country.
To conclude
,
although
 cultures are getting similar throughout different
countries
, it has brought out some problems and benefits
also
 and
people
 should accept the new
culture
 but it is equally important to remember their own
culture
.

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