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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing as compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree.

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One of the major functions of the government is to resolve criminal issues and provide peace to the citizens. The latest technology has provided methods to curb the
crime
,
as a result
, sharp decline has been observed in
such
 cases as compared to that of the past. I completely agree with
this
 view and strongly believe that the latest electronic gadgets have assisted police in tacking with the offenders.
First
 of all, for 24 hours vigilance on
crime
, the electronic devices named closed-circuit television cameras have proved beneficial for the policemen. To explain it
further
, these cameras can be installed in all the isolated or sensitive areas where there are any chances of robbery, theft or murder and
then
 one
person
 with the help of computer can keep an eye on all the places sitting in the office.
In addition
, now police department has all the details
such
 as fingerprints of the citizens of a country and with the help of computers, the procedure to match the fingerprints of the lawbreaker from the records where all data is stored is quite efficient and less time-consuming.
Moreover
, improvement in the communication channel by the use of the internet has
also
 proved a boon for alleviating
crime
 and getting faster resolution of the cases.
For example
, nowadays the
crime
 details can be passed to any location without any time lag by use of internet or phone and if the
person
 is doing
crime
 in any other country or state, it is easier to inform and coordinate with the local police in that area.
Additionally
, devices
such
 as Lie-detector is
also
 advantageous in handling
crime
.
For instance
, it is not essential to torture a criminal to know the details of the
crime
,
instead
, there is a simple mechanism, by drafting some questions related to the incidence and enquiring the
person
 and lie detector device can tell if the
person
 is answering wrong or right. To conclude, in my perspective, technological advancement has been proved beneficial for solving and decreasing the
crime
 rate because security personnel now equip with gadgets.
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