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Band 6.5

Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is thought by some that a previous
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 with simple innovation is better than the present
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 with advanced technical processes.
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 of advanced technology makes our lives easier and faster finish work
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faster.
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 The improvement in the technological process gives humans easy days.
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 means we
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 innovation every day multiple times, as when people need to do their weekly calendar, they
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 smartphones, which is very simple and does not need a lot of effort.
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, if people want to have groceries, they have to drive a car or walk to reach the supermarket, collect what they need and carry all of it back home
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 now it is easier to order them online using digital tools and get it by your door.
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, in my country, there is a survey comparing between
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 of applications to order anything, with normal shopping, which found that online shopping is less complicated. A large amount of work can be finished faster by using advanced technology. Digital tools and AI assist many workers, and they can
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 these tools to collect data, process it and get fast results. Any one of those steps may take days for a human worker to do.
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, in developed countries, the introduction of the newest AI applications in universities to help lecturers during the preparation of lectures, assessment of students, to administer exams and to get final results, leads to great improvement and faster completion with accuracy than before. In conclusion,
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 essay completely disagrees that the past
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 with simple technology was favourable than nowadays, because of the great enhancement of innovations that make
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 easier and faster finishing of work than before.

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task response
Plan what you write first. Say your view in the first line.
development
Give clear facts or ideas to prove your point. Make each idea easy to see.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use glue words like 'also', 'but', 'so', and 'then'.
language
Use simple words and short sentences. Check grammar.
structure
Keep one main idea in each paragraph and add a small example.
structure
A clear view is stated in the intro and restated in the conclusion.
content
Examples come from real life and are easy to follow.
coherence
Some good linking words are used to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • simple
  • technology
  • interpersonal relationships
  • face-to-face conversations
  • genuine connections
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • rapid pace
  • gadgets
  • social media
  • overwhelming
  • pressure
  • distractions
  • productivity
  • multi-function devices
  • tasks
  • cost-effectiveness
  • affordable
  • accessible
  • financial strain
  • environmental impact
  • electronic waste
  • sustainability
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