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Some people think that team sports prepare children for work life but others think individual sports are better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. 21.8

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Sports is an essential part of everyone's
life
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, particularly, children. Owing to
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, it is believed by some that children's gets prepared for their career by
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 sports while in others view playing individually is better. In my view,
team
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 spirit is more important than independent play. On the one hand, playing in coordination with other people assist them in learning many essential
life
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 skills
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 as
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 spirit because in later
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also
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 people have to work with different teams in their career and it is extremely important that they do not feel complicated in working with others on their
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.
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, childhood is the best time to incorporate
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 skills in children because at
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 stage learning curve is not much complicated and sport is the best platform to teach
team
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 spirit. Individual sports,
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, has its own significance in the professional
life
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. According to its advocates, it prepares children to take their decision independently, which is crucial in work
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also
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. As there are many scenarios in a person's
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 where he has to take his decision on its own and solo sport is the way to teach children to take critical decisions individually.
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, in my opinion, playing in a
team
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 can teach more crucial abilities for future professional
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, namely
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 coordination and decision making as there are times when a
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 member has to take final decisions not only for himself but for for all members. To conclude, in my perspective solo play and
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 play both has an important role to play, but the former is more crucial and can prepare children more strongly for their future
life
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.
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