The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 with the amount of research funding allocated to each of those diseases.
The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six
diseases
in Someland
in 1990 with the amount of Correct your spelling
Homeland
research
funding allocated to each of those diseases
.
The figures clearly indicate that there were spent about 200 million funds for research
of
AIDS, Change preposition
on
while
the rate of the
death from Correct article usage
apply
this
disease
was approximately 300000 people
. It is clearly seen from the second
graph that in 1990 the most of
Change preposition
apply
people
died from TB (1800000), however
the amount spent on TB Add a comma
,however
research
was the lowest (25 millions
). For tropical Change to singular
million
diseases
and Leprosy allocated 75 million for each disease
and the level of death was 300000 of
tropical Change preposition
for
diseases
. An
amount of death by leprosy has the lowest rate, which Correct article usage
The
are
about 100000 dead persons. There are 500000 dead Change the verb form
is
people
from Diarrhea and about 300000 dead people
from malaria. The medical
Correct article usage
Medical
research
spent about 50-60 million for these
Change the determiner
this disease
these diseases
disease
respectively.
To sum up
, funding allocation for disease
research
in Someland
is not wholly determined by the number of deaths for which each Correct your spelling
Homeland
disease
is responsible in a given year.Submitted by ovorno on
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