The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 with the amount of research funding allocated to each of those diseases.

The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 with the amount of research funding allocated to each of those diseases.
The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six
diseases
in
Someland
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Homeland
in 1990 with the amount of
research
funding allocated to each of those
diseases
. The figures clearly indicate that there were spent about 200 million funds for
research
of
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AIDS,
while
the rate of
the
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death from
this
disease
was approximately 300000
people
. It is clearly seen from the
second
graph that in 1990 the most
of
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people
died from TB (1800000),
however
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the amount spent on TB
research
was the lowest (25
millions
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). For tropical
diseases
and Leprosy allocated 75 million for each
disease
and the level of death was 300000
of
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tropical
diseases
.
An
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amount of death by leprosy has the lowest rate, which
are
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about 100000 dead persons. There are 500000 dead
people
from Diarrhea and about 300000 dead
people
from malaria.
The medical
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research
spent about 50-60 million for
these
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this disease
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disease
respectively.
To sum up
, funding allocation for
disease
research
in
Someland
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Homeland
is not wholly determined by the number of deaths for which each
disease
is responsible in a given year.
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