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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
government
 should expend only on preventing diseases and health related problems rather than combating contagious diseases and providing medicines. I largely agree with
this
 as it will prove advantageous for people to remain healthy and save
money
. On one hand, promoting prevention measures by
government
Suggestion
the government
 helps to aware people about the multifarious consequences of unhealthy eating habits which certainly assist them to save
money
 and remain fit and healthy.
In other words
, if people stay away from
such
 habits, it will definitely lessen the burden of
government
 in terms of expending
money
 on providing treatments and medicines.
Furthermore
, people not only become more
productive but
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productive, but
also
 love stress free by being aware about the benefits of remaining healthy.
Moreover
, taking prevention methods people will not fall
ill
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ill, hence
hence
 it will increase the life expectancy. To
examplify
be characteristic of
exemplify
, there has been a
declination
Suggestion
decline
 in the mortality rate due to the ban on cigarettes and alcohol in various states of India.
On the other hand
, there are various fatal diseases which need to be treated
therefore
aong
with a forward motion
along
 with prevention methods
government
 should allocate funds towards providing medicines as deprived people cannot afford to have extravagantly expensive medicines. In conclusion,
although
 safeguarding people by
awaring
a grant made by a law court
awarding
wearing
 them through different methods save the
money
of
Suggestion
from
government
 and people, funding medicines and providing treatment
is
Suggestion
is also proving
has also proven
is also proven
also proves
also
 prove beneficial for destitute people.

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