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These days people in some country are living in a "throw-away" society which mean people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue?

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In modern society average life of things has decreased. Now a days people would love to use the items for a shorter duration compare to the earlier.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why people in some countries don't like to use things for a longer period and put forward several solutions to
this
 issue. One of the major reasons why people would love to change the things in some time is
technology
 development in few countries. With
number
 of resources available to people and advancement in
technology
 encourage people to upgrade themselves.
For example
: average life of a cell phone has decreased from 2 years to 1 years because of revolutionary changes, which attract a lot of people and people wants to get hands on to the latest
technology
 as soon as possible, in the mobile industry
.
Accept space
.
This
 way
number
 of devices not being used is getting increased which has significant impact on environmental change.
For example
: electronic wastage and
number
 of vehicles on the road are two main reasons of global warming. To adhere the issue of unused items, the
government
 has taken various steps.
For example
: to control the electronic wastes, the
government
 is providing the 80% of subsidies on applying the plant to recycle the electronics waste.
Similarly
, the
government
 is encouraging people to use the electric vehicles
instead
 of using the petrol or diesel vehicles. To increase the sale of electronic vehicles, the
government
 has reduced the 50% import duty. In conclusion, in fast developing countries more and more
number
 of unused products are increasing.
This
 essay discussed how often people have started replacing the products because of change in
technology
.
This
 essay
also
 discussed about the initiatives taken by the
government
 to solve the issues because of products which are not used by anyone.

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