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Natural talents are more important than working hard to achieve success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The topic of factors contributing towards a
person
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's
success
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 is often argued about. Some people believe that naturally talented people are more successful than hard working individuals, while others reject it. In my opinion, natural
skills gain
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skills, gain
 an edge over hard
work
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 in the context of attaining
success
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.
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 with, I believe that hard
work
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 is the backbone of being successful.
This
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 implies that a
person
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 lacking natural skills may
initially
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 stumble, but his hard
work
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 helps him to get back to his path and attain
success
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.
On the other hand
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, a
person
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 lacking hard
work
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 may start his journey towards attaining his goal; he may enchant others with his naturally acquired
talents but
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talents, but
 in the absence of hard
work
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 he will not be able to complete his journey. My judgement is based on my personal experience. During my academic years, intelligent students were applauded by the teachers at the start of the session;
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, it was always
the hard
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the hardest
 working student who managed to sail through the session and shine bright.
Besides
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 academics, I opine that association of hard
work
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 and
success
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 rate in
profesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
 life can not be neglected.
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 is evident from the fact that it is only hard
work
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 that has enabled me to not only retain but
also
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 excel in my professional career since eleven years. During
this
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 time, many naturally talented people were hired in my project but
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failed
fail
fails
 to
work
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 hard contributed towards their lack of
success
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, and eventual sacking from the job.
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 dispels the notion that naturally talented people are more successful. Having discussed the merits of hard
work
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 in academic and professional life, I would like to add that a
person
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 who is gifted and
also
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 understands the importance of
hardwork
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hard work
 may acquire unprecedented
success
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. Einstein is an evident example of being gifted yet he was a school drop out.
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, it was his hard
work
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 that later helped him to prove his metal in applied research.
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 implies that realizing ones true natural potential and
then
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 working hard towards one's goals
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are
 the key towards
success
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. To conclude, some people may be naturally
blessed but
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blessed, but
 without hard
work
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 they can neither attain
success
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 in academic nor professional life. Gifted people can only gain
edge
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an edge
 in these domains through hard
work
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.

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