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Some believe that is the responsibility of people to take care about the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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Environment
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 is the connecting network of all beings. The beauty of it lies in the hands of caretakers. Climate paves the pathway for our past, present and future. When we say
environment
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, it includes the natural resources like trees, animals, land and
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 water resources.
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, maintaining of our aura now has become a primary concern. Government has a saying, 'For the people, By the people'. So when it cares for us, it should
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 take care of our surroundings and the steps to future. But due to the increase in population, the government fails to cope up the challenges of saving the surroundings. Though we have strict laws and policies for preserving
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 not much people follow it precisely. Due to factors like population, pollution and deforestation, the value of saving our
environment
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 is lost. If government educates people through an awareness program, it may help.
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, people became busy in their own daily routine and do not care much about habitat. A survey on the topic ' Caretakers of Envirnoment ' produced shocking results that a majority of people are less concerned about ambiance. For better future people need to protect it and pass the baton to the
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 generation. People should avoid putting the blame on each other rather start preserving along with others. Irrespective of people and government, we humans need to thank the
environment
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 and enrich it. People need to feel the importance and benefits we get from them. So our primary duty to the
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 is by caring and protecting. Activities like afforestation, cleaning of lakes, preserving ponds should be encouraged.
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