Some people think that the development of technology helps to reduce crime, while other people think it encourages crime.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Few people believe that
advancement
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the advancement
of
technology
aids
decrease
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decreases
the rate of criminal activities.
However
,
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,
according to some individuals and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
also
think that science and
technology
are boosting illegal acts than controlling it. The progress made by IT and technical department has played a
remarakable
unusual or striking
remarkable
role in controlling violation of law and order.IT services
such
as internet
,
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,
audio-video recordings
,
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,
digital camera's
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
have allowed us to track and reach people involved in the act of
crime
immediatly
without delay or hesitation; with no time intervening
immediately
.
Therefore
, people are now more aware and careful of the consequences they will have to face if they do any criminal activity.According to a recent survey of
crime
control organization
,
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,
there is
20% decrease
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a 20 % decrease
in theft and robbery around the world because of the security camera installed
at
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in
private and public places.
However
, In my opinion things invented by the advancement of
technology
has
multiplied
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multiplied, crime
crime
rate as compared to the past.Gadgets
such
as mobile phones, wifi-devices
,
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,
camera's have helped people to carry out illegal actions
succesfully
with success; in a successful manner
successfully
and safely.
Technology
has made any type of information available to almost everyone irrespective of the fact whether it is used in a positive or negative way.Another reason is that
technology
has made people frustrated and aggressive due to which individuals are drawn more towards
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
crime
.
For
example video
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example, video
games like "PUBG" and "blue whale" have brain washed people and forced them to do unlawful acts regardless of its result.
Thus
,
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,
development of
technology
has done more damage to the society than its betterment. In conclusion
,
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,
some people are getting benefits of
modern world
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the modern world
of
science but
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science, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think that new inventions of
technology
are
fueling
the activity of supplying or taking on fuel
fuelling
negativity and immoral acts specially among young generation.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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