Some people think that prison sentences should not be used to deal with criminals. Education and skills training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Punishing offenders with a detention time has been a controversial topic for many years. Because there is a thought in the society that believe, with the help of
reabilitation
the restoration of someone to a useful place in society
rehabilitation
programs these people can be brought into the correct path. I agree that well organized training sessions would help prisoners to develop certain skills that will be useful when they are released.
Firstly
,
although
they have made some mistakes along the way,
majority
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the majority
of these
individuls
a human being
individuals
are good in their hearts. Unfortunately,
current prison system
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the current prison system
does not provide  a fair chance for them to become better citizens.
For instance
, when a
person
first
enters to a jail, it is surrounded by various
type
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types
of criminals who have been locked up for several years, in a
oder
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
to survive in
this
unplesent
disagreeable to the senses, to the mind, or feelings
unpleasant
environment aforementioned
person
has to blend in with those with bad intentions.
Hence
, if these detentions have better methods to get themselves busy with,
then
they would not end up with the bad influence of other dangerous offenders.
On the other hand
, the skills taught during lock-up time would be enormously valuable in their future.
For example
,
asume
take to be the case or to be true; accept without verification or proof
assume
assumed
assumes
that a particular
person
gets released from a lock-up that had
gave
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given
him specific knowledge about a job.
Then
, at least that
person
has
a
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an
opportunity to select
the better
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the best
path other than continuing previous disruptive lifestyle.
Moreover
, the self confidence it
provide
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provides
is crucial to build up the lost self respect of theirs.
In addition
, these programs offer a numerous benefits for the society
such
as producing more trained work force for a
nations
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nation
and helping to reduce the crimes around a country. In conclusion, the prisoner education and skill training programs have a number of advantages
such
as building trained
workfore
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work fore
and motivating offenders to leave the criminal activities.
Therefore
,
such
actions would generate
greate many
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a great many
great many
greet many
create many
of benefits for the society and for the individuals.

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