People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves their families and the society so working hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree?

It has become apparent in recent years that people spend a lot of time in their workplaces than before. It is argued that it has drawbacks for themselves as well as to their family and to the public.
This
essay disagrees with
this
statement because of financial reasons and better career perspectives.
To begin
with, it is true that, if you work more, you will earn more and
this
is vital for your family members. Nowadays a lot of positions in different spheres are hourly based.
Also
, companies paying overtime rates, which can be 2 times more than your standard payment.
For example
, by taking extra hours I was able to buy a new car just in 3 months
instead
of 6 months. Another reason is that spending most of our time in the office can be useful in terms of our career growth. Because if we will take some extra hours, we can increase our knowledge of the subject which relates to our primary job functions, which can be an advantage not only in our work but
also
for the society.
Moreover
, employers usually respect employee who takes care of his or her job and because of
this
, they are able to be promoted.
For instance
, a recent study found that 70% of senior management representatives spend more time in order to achieve the
next
level in their occupation. Taking all these points into the consideration, long working hours has not disadvantages which are related to the workers' family or society,
instead
of
this
it has an economic advantage and it helps to change our work position to the better ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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