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Some people think that watching sport is a waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent days, most of people have passed the
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 on the television, particularly watching sports channels at their free
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.
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 essay agrees that the watching sports
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 takes away valuable
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 and the channels does not improve beneficial affection. In the new century, people need more
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 in their rush lives,
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 the
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 is the most important part of our lifestyle.
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, the majority cannot find any
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 for improving their personal skills.  
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, some employers working too many hours until gaining more free
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.
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, they can find a personal education,
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 as learning a language, listening to some beneficial music or discovering special subjects about their jobs in the library. The
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 effect is the using
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 proactively. Two beneficial preferences pass
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 tv or without tv.
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 and important part of watching tv is
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 preferences.
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, the
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 number size is huge and the viewer should find out trusted
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 as documentaries, sci-fi, and news which teaches new information about life. The
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 preference is out of television, which is extended with human social interest,
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 as promenade
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 in the parks, playing poker, drinking alcohol with friendships, walking on coastal and watching skies. A recent study has shown that watching sports
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 has an effect on brain cells rather than other activities. In short, our important life is very short for wasting of
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, particularly watching sport channels.
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, we steer our
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 to beneficial activities to improve our personal skills.

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