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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Owing to the necessity of meal enjoyment, there is no doubt that ensuring easy access to various
food
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 opportunities from each culture is crucial for taste buds' pleasure. It is a commonly held belief that supermarket provides commercial
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 for customers.
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, there is
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 an argument that opposes
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 idea. In my opinion, I am more convinced about purchasing global
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 from a supermarket. One key positive feature of
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 is the ease of fulfilling curiosity to try specific cultural
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.
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, there is no need to travel for meals enjoying .
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, Korean fans can try a variety of choices related to snacks, noodles, and even desserts in a supermarket within their region.
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, citizens with the inability to travel for circumstances should be considered. It is
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 possible to say that elderly people could face challenges to try
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 from foreign cultures.
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old man 70 years old who has health concerns may buy
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 trendy
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 locally
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 of sitting on a flight for a long period of time. A potential negative development from
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 is the reputation of a certain recipe could be affected
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 a lack of cultural knowledge.
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, a popular Egyptian dish with important ingredients carries the Egypt culture. UK supermarkets could sell the wrong product because they thought it was from Egypt. Another point to consider: high prices in supermarkets will be an issue for certain individuals.
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 means it can be quite a challenge to buy trendy global
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 from supermarkets
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 its price.
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, despite the existence of different views of these recent developments, I strongly think the positive features can overweight the negative ones.

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task response
Consider providing a clearer thesis statement in your introduction that outlines your position more definitively.
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Make sure to clearly explain how each example directly supports your main point, enhancing clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and fully develops that idea before moving on to the next point.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words (e.g., 'Additionally', 'Furthermore') more effectively to improve the transition between ideas and paragraphs.
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Your essay presents a balanced viewpoint on a relevant contemporary issue, engaging the reader.
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You provided specific examples to illustrate your points, which is important for clarity and engagement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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