You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

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Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you doing well. Yesterday I saw a brochure

along with

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a morning newspaper for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. I felt too much excitement when I saw the brochure because I, love mountains and walking on uneven tracks is my favourite hobby. I, try to manage my time for

a daily walks

Correct the article-noun agreement

daily walks

a daily walk

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and if I have spare time,

then

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walking on the tracks is my preferred choice

That is

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why I can't imagine missing the opportunity, you are going to provide people like me. Please share more details about the procedure and requirements of the event. One more thing I, want to explain is that I have some problems regarding my health.

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my doctor's advice, I should avoid hiking but can do a walk on a smooth track. I feel

disappointment

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disappointed

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because I don't want to miss

such

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a golden opportunity. I hope

this

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will be a historical event for the people who love nature and adventure. I'll try my best to join

this

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venture. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar

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Be sure to directly address all parts of the prompt in a clear and structured manner. Your letter should express why you are interested, ask for dates and prices, and express fitness concerns explicitly.

coherence cohesion

Your letter's structure could be more cohesive. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. Introduce your letter with a greeting, follow with paragraphs addressing each of the letter's requirements, and conclude with an appropriate closing.

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Maintain a suitable tone throughout your letter. For formal inquiries, avoid overly casual phrases and ensure polite language. Use conditional structures to politely make requests or express concerns.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

177 words

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