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Consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s life. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s life. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Consumer goods have become the mainstay of people’s living.  
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 essay is an attempt to study the advantages and disadvantages and provide a conclusion. In today’s fast paced world, consumer goods are a boon to humanity.  
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, they are available in all categories ranging from automobiles, furniture, household appliances etc.  While they make life easy and comfortable, they do not cost an arm and a leg and are generally affordable.  
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, one can cook up a pre cooked meal to satisfy hunger or reach any far off place in no time by taking a vehicle or perform all household chores
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 as laundry, dish cleaning, sweeping and mopping at the click of a button of the washing machine, dish cleaner, and vacuum cleaner respectively.  
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 definitely leaves some room for an individual to pursue their hobbies or passions, which leads to better living standards.
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, consumer goods have their drawbacks as well.  
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 results in obesity and other ailments
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 as cardiac problems, diabetes, joint aches, respiratory issues etc.    
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 isolation is known to cause depression tendencies in individuals.  Excessive usage of automobiles is fast depleting our natural resources
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 as petrol, diesel and adding to the existing pollution levels.  It would be prudent to say that while consumer goods still continue to be a boon to mankind, its usage should be regulated and monitored on an individual and government level to ensure it continues to be a boon and not a bane.
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