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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, with the advent of various types of vaccine, it has become easy to eradicate several dreaded diseases. The most recent issue is whether it should make a law to compulsory
immunisation
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 among the children or parent have the right to take decisions about vaccination of their children. I support to former statement and
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 essay will discuss both view in details. On the one hand, as vaccines have proven beneficial to prevent some
disease
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 among the children.
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, by the
immunisation
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, many dreaded diseases will be eliminated from the
society
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.
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,
immunisation
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 is important as both socially and economically.
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, in early twentieth century, smallpox
disease
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 was spread over the children, which leads to some severe problem
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 as disfigurement and hearing inability.
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, government aided the program to mandatory
immunise
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 against smallpox, which really helpful in eradicating the smallpox from the
society
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.
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, for maintaining health and
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 free
society
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, it is necessary to
immunise
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 the kids against some common diseases.
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, it can be possible that, some vaccines cause illness effect among child after vaccination.
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, the parent having concerns towards their children's health and sometime they have decided to
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 the child or not.
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, in the initial stage of the polio drop program, some children are complaining against the potential side effects to the body after vaccination.
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, the guardian should have the right to know about various ill effects of the vaccines. To conclude, by comparing both views, it is necessary to make it compulsory to
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 the children against the various diseases, which is helpful to make
society
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disease
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 free.
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, it is important to aware the parent about illness side effect of some vaccine, but
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, sophisticated them with benefits of
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 of the children to enjoy
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 free life.
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