The restoration of old buildings in major city throughout the world would involve enormous expenditure. This money would bring more benefits if it was used to provide new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In order to bring back ancient buildings in major cities all over the world, huge expenses are required. It

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is, therefore

therefore

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, argued that

such

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money

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would be more useful if spent on providing new housing and developing road. I agree with

this

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opinion in its entirety because it will improve the

life

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of the citizens and

also

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help to save

cost

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costs

To begin

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with, constructing new houses and improving the roads will enhance the living condition of the people. Good roads and shelter are major amenities required by any city to have a better

life

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, comparing the living conditions of individuals in

developed

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developing

and underdeveloped countries, it is evident that those in the former countries who live in old building live a less glamorous

life

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compared to the

later

referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

latter

countries where there are new houses and better roads. It

can

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can, therefore

therefore

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, be logically deduced that improving the roads and providing modern buildings lead to

better

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a better life

life

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Additionally

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, spending

money

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on modern houses and

road

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the road

roads

instead

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of using it to restore old buildings help to save cost as it takes

quiet

to a degree (not used with a negative)

quite

a lot of

money

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to construct old houses.

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, it can be argued that ancient houses can serve as tourist

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

and in return, generate

money

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for the cities, the huge expenditure involved make it economically unwise to embark on. As a matter of fact, new houses can be built in ways that can attract tourist

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as the popular tower of

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Indians

the Indian

and the haven of Germany. So, same purpose of old buildings can be achieved with modern buildings and good roads, while spending less. In conclusion,

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, ancient houses can be vital to most cities throughout the world, it's more beneficial if spendings are on providing new housing and improving road

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

296 words

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The restoration of old buildings in major city throughout the world would involve enormous expenditure. This money would bring more benefits if it was used to provide new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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