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In some countries more and more shops are open longer hours every day. What are positive and negative developments of this?

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The trend of doing business till late night is burgeoning in many nations;
however
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, it has both positive and negative effects on individuals and society. While it
begets
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 benefits in terms of convenience
for
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of
 the working people, some
security
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 risks are associated with
this
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development
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. To embark with, the good side of extended opening hours is the privilege it gives to the people with a tight schedule to shop at their convenient
time
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.
This
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 is to say, many individuals have tiring routine due to the engagement in odd jobs along with the full-
time
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 job, so they have to take a day off to do groceries and purchase other
house-hold
a social unit living together
household
 stuff.
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,
this
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development
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 brings
ease
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easy
 for the people, who are unable to spare
time
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 from their daily routine, to do
shopping
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the shopping
 during day
time
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.
For instance
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, employers in Canada claimed that the number of absentees from workplace to do shopping was more during the start of the month but now it is reduced to a great extent.
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,
this
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development
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 has brought some safety troubles for the business owners because at
mid-night
12 o'clock at night; the middle of the night
midnight
 shops are liable to theft and robbery. Local offenders found it
easy
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easier
 to rob from shops, as the allowed working hours by the government for shops is till 8 o clock after that owners do it at their own risk. While the government provides
security
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 for day
time
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, at
night
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night, security
security
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 is a great issue associated with
this
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development
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.
For example
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, local police of California stated in the Daily Times that 46% of criminal cases are reported after 12 AM due to
security
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 lapse. To conclude,
this
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 essay argued that the opening of shops for prolonged hours embolden consumers to shop at their own pace;
however
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, on the negative side, the threat of
increase
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an increase
 in crime rate is the major drawback associated with it. If government provides
security
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 at night, it would be a good
development
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 for the nation.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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