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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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It
is universally acknowledge
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is universally acknowledged
 that spanking children is one of the most debatable and contentious concerns these
day
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days
.
Although
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, it is thought by many parents that; corporal punishment is an extremely effective way to make them behave.
This
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 essay will have deep insight on all aspects of the argument, whereas the idea of smacking kids is completely preposterous.
Firstly
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,
smacking
the act of smoking tobacco or other substances
smoking
 is a long lasting lesson learnt and has great impact on
child’s behavior
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the child’s behaviour
child’s behaviour
a child’s behaviour
. There is a robust argument for beating of children by their parents, they believe that remembering the pain of spanking will refrain child from ill-mannered activities in future.
In addition
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, infants nowadays are stubborn and they do
no
negation of a word or group of words
not
 behave on verbal warnings so, parents are only left with physical
punishments
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punishment
 options. A
succinate
briefly giving the gist of something
succinct
 example proclaiming
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, In
UK
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the UK
, statistics reveals that, 80% of the children refuse to obey their parents,
parents
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the parents
 admit that their
off-spring
the immediate descendants of a person
offspring
 learn more after spanking and it has a deep impact.
On the other hand
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, despite the few benefits of spanking, considering it as
most effective method
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the most effective method
 of civilizing children is completely a ridiculous approach.
Additionally
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, it causes an irreversible damage to the individual’s psychology and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 towards the society and
they
of them or themselves
their
 loss the sense of love, affection and respect for their elders.
For instance
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, an 8-year-old child was reported by the hospital who suffered from physical punishment and became a psychopath.
Furthermore
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, it brings many disastrous effects
in
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on
 their life and they eventually become unable to bring their best out of them. To conclude,
this
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 essay argued that; physically hitting is considered as best technique ever by those who have a flawed understanding of parenting and underestimate the consequences of what they believe.
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