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Many young people nowadays are imitating celebrities in sports and movies. In your opinion, is this good or bad? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own experience.

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It is now quite common for young people to imitate the
lifestyle
 of famous actors and sports personalities. In my opinion,
this
 trend has both merits and demerits. Celebrities are people who have achieved name and fame in their field. They worked hard to become what they are. Obviously, there are a lot of things that young people can learn
from
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about
 famous people. Perseverance is one of them. Successful
sportspersons
 have put in years of hard
work
 to gain international name and fame. Many of them hail from very ordinary backgrounds and yet they achieved stupendous success by virtue of their hard
work
. A young person following an eminent sports personality in all likelihood will get inspired by his idol and learn the value of hard
work
 and perseverance.
This
, in turn, benefits his own life and career. Famous actors and musicians all have similar stories to tell and are an inspiration for millions. Their success story inspires young people to script their own success stories.
In addition
, youngsters following celebrities in fashion or sports are more likely to become health conscious.
For example
, teenagers admiring Bollywood celebrities often aspire to have the six pack
abs
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ABS
abuse
abs'
 that their screen idols possess.
This
 encourages them to
work
 out and it benefits their health. On the flip side, celebrities have their own flaws and a youngster should never try to copy their
lifestyle
 blindly.
For example
, many actors are famous for their lavish
lifestyle
. They spend
enormously
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enormous
 on garments,
cars and
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cars, and
 other accessories. A teenager who wants these luxuries for himself will unwittingly invite trouble into his life. When he realizes that he cannot live the glam
lifestyle
 he aspires
for
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to
, he will become disappointed. Some of them may even get involved in criminal activities to fund their lavish lifestyles. In conclusion, when teenagers get inspired by celebrities, it can have both positive and negative
impact
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impacts
 on their lives. There are certainly a lot of things they can learn
from
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about
 famous people.
However
, they should never try to copy their
lifestyle
 blindly.
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