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Many organization and companies ask their staff to wear a uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? What kind of jobs should have a work uniform?

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A uniform is a specific suit or
clothes
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 worn by a group of people
such
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 as doctors, students and pilots. Nowadays some firms and organisations tend to ask their employees to have the same clothing. In
this
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 essay, I will explain the pros and cons of wearing similar suits and show who must wear a particular one.
To begin
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 with, there are many benefits of wearing
uniforms
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. First , if you wear similar
clothes
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 every
day
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 you will save time and energy, so you will not find
difficult
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it difficult
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 to pick up or look for an outfit to wear every
day
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.
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, my mom is
busywork
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busy working
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 and a single man, she
works
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 in a company and everyone asks to wear the same outfit a black trouser and a white blouse, so she doesn't have to find a suitable one for every
day
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 of the week.
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wearing the same
clothes
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 creates cultural identity and awareness of heritage. Many individuals in Saudi Arabia have to wear the formal custom, thobe and getra for men and abaya for women, especially in government offices.
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, wearing similar outfits will have some drawbacks, if you wear the same colour for weeks months or even years, you will get easily bored. my sister
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 in school and the principal forced them to wear a grey suit and she got sick of repeating the same one and would like to replace it with a new colour.
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, Many individuals find it formal to wear
uniforms
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especially
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, especially
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 in fashion and design organisations where creativity is a priority.
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, my aunt
works
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 in fashion design and and the staff can wear any
clothes
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 they like and each
day
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 she is surprised and excited about their
clothes
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. I think there are specific people who should wear
uniforms
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.
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, students should wear
uniforms
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 because it creates a sense of discipline and respect.
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 nurses and every person who
works
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 in health ministry should wear
uniforms
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. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages of wearing
uniforms
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. Some individuals may save their time and energy
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 it can bore them. Doctors and students should wear a uniform for the reasons I mentioned above.

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task achievement
Try to develop more detailed arguments in your explanation of the drawbacks of uniforms. This can give your essay greater depth and clarity.
coherence cohesion
Working on transitions between ideas can improve the cohesion of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a well-defined introduction and conclusion that clearly outline the topic and summarize the discussion.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples to illustrate your points, which strongly supports your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • socio-economic disparities
  • professional image
  • brand recognition
  • restrict individual expression
  • customer-facing industries
  • job satisfaction
  • financial burden
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • identifiable
  • professional appearance
  • sense of belonging
  • corporate identity
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