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Precautions is better than cure. researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measure. To what extent do you agree?

#precautions #cure #diseases #measure
It is thought by some people that precaution methods are cheaper than having to cure someone from a certain sickness.
However
, while I believe that specific measures have a positive impact on a
body
, I
also
 agree that they can be damaging to someone's well-being if used in an extreme way. It is a common fact that to maintain a healthy state of mind and
body
, individuals should be careful regarding several aspects in their daily routine.
In other words
, having good habits
such
 as, morning walks and eating vegetables more often will surely decrease the chances of getting different maladies namely, cardiovascular diseases and diabetes.
For instance
, a recent statistics published in Dr. Oshawa magazine showed that people who are engaged in physical activity for three times per week, have less medical problems than those living a sedentary lifestyle.
Therefore
, people are encouraged to have and maintain good habits to decrease the chances of sickness.
On the other hand
, getting obsessed about having a good health may lead to some drawbacks. To put it differently, some individuals don't moderate their lifestyle, where they believe that working out excessively, or having only healthy food will guarantee a perfect physique.
As a result
, the
body
 collapse due to the imbalance of nutrition or the exhaustion of the organs. One clear example, is the breakdown of Christiano Ronaldo after the attempt of getting a healthy
body
 by only having specific nutrition and working out.
Hence
, having a balance in both food intake and exercises is
also
 a necessity to prevent a negative impact. In conclusion, it is surely beneficial to have a healthy diet and lifestyle,
Nevertheless
, if precautions are not used correctly, it can backfire on someone's health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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