Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?
In
this
era, many interactions are done by technology
which means relationships
have changed a lot in comparison to the past. Although
it has many negative effects like cold relationships
, fake people
on social media
, and bitter divorce among partners, its positive impacts outweigh its negative consequences.
On the one hand, technology
is the main cause of easy-making relationships
and finding a good job, on the other, it affects on emigrant’s feelings who are far from their family. First of all, many friendships are made on platforms like Instagram, Twitter, Snapchat, and so on, and young people
start to chat and find some friends who are casual acquaintances. Then
they go on a date and they might have a long relationship that leads to marriage. The next thing is those who want to find a good job can find co-workers or some managers to have a conversation with. LinkedIn provides a platform for interaction between managers and workers. Finally
, Some students are far from their hometowns and their parents. By video calling they can have connections with their family easily which prevents their mental health from isolation.
However
, there are some consequences that technology
has in human relationships
. On the one hand, people
might get cold with each other especially those who are engaged because they are far from each other and do not have a relational face-to-face. On the other, social media
is packed with fake people
whose pages illustrate some cool hobbies and rich entertainment. They just post their travel, parties, good food, and shopping, whereas
, they do not share posts about the real challenges in their life and the tough situations. So, they can cheat on the younger and make the worst relationship. Finally
, many divorces occur because one of the partners is cheating and making love with another person on social media
. it is a betrayal of the spouses.
In conclusion, with technology
, making friends and having connections are easier these days which is a positive development. I wish the government would teach young people
how they can use social media
and technology
in some classes in universities.Submitted by dayansabet on
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