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Some people believe that children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Watching
television
 (especially informative
television
) is regarded as an effective method of learning, because audio-visual information can attract students’ attention and engage their interest.
Although
 many TV programmes have educational value, I do not agree with the idea of increasing screen
time
.
Television
 viewing can interfere with children’s studies and other activities which can benefit these children’s intellectual development. They may not able to achieve good grades in exams because screen
time
 displaces the
time
 they could spend doing homework. It is
also
 worrying to see that
television
 viewing can crowd out those activities which can improve children’s intellectual skills,
such
 as reading, playing chess and board games. Another problem is that long screen
time
 can limit children’s social development. Those children who sit in front of their TV many hours,
instead
 of playing games with their peers and communicating with teachers. They will become unsociable and unwilling to express their views and understand the thoughts of other people. Without good communication skills, they will have difficulty in gaining
knowledge
, drawing upon the ideas of classmates or teachers, and achieving academic success.
On the other hand
, I understand that
television
 has exposed children to a world of
knowledge
. There are many educational programmes aimed for children, allowing them to gain an insight into different subjects.
For example
, documentaries can help children learn about historical events while foreign language channels can help them acquire foreign languages.
This
 kind of
knowledge
 can complement what they learn at school. To summaries, I would argue that parents and teachers should impose restrictions on children’s
television
 viewing,
although
television
 shows are a source of
knowledge
. Watching TV can have an adverse impact on exam grades and social skills.
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