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A healthy person is often describe as someone who has a good diet, gets lots of exercise and avoids stress. What do people do to stay healthy in your country.

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It is often believed by many that people who are healthy are most times characterized by the kinds of balanced meals they eat, the bodily exercises they do as well as the way and manner they disallow stress on themselves. In my opinion, ensuring personal
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 and getting adequate
rest
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 is very essential in maintaining a good state of health.
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, the level of a person's personal
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 says a lot about his healthiness. Germs and diseases are everywhere and as
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, one needs to ensure that adequate cleanliness is maintained at all times to avoid infestations. A recent study showed that dirty people visit the hospital with ailments frequently than those that are conscious about their
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. Just like the usual saying that "cleanliness is
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 to godliness". In another way, people who do not value
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 are often prone to sicknesses.
Rest
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 is vital in restoring the body's
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to cause to separate and go in different directions
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 energy during daily activities.
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 can be done by enjoying sufficient sleep or having quality leisure moments. A study comparing the activities of the urban and the rural dwellers showed that the rural dwellers have more time of
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 and leisure than the urban residents and in turn have a higher life expectancy rate than those in the urban centres. In conclusion, people in my country consider being healthy at all times as important,
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 they achieved by ensuring that a good
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 culture and sufficient
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 taking is maintained always. These are part of the of the keys to living a healthy long life.
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