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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free times. This can benefit teenagers and benefit the community as well. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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Young people have had a dynamic role in supporting
community
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 and a few people opine that unpaid charity
work
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 should be a part of their daily free activities. I completely agree with
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 trend and it would be beneficial for both individuals and
community
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 in terms of
work
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 skills and dynamic labour force.
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 with, the main reason why youth should engage themselves in
community
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 services is that it fosters them with working skills.
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 to say,
such
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 type of activities
tend
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tends
 to provide necessary skill, which is required to adopt a certain professional field.
This
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 would enable the individuals to gain enough
working
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work
 experience and would help them seek jobs. Take
for example
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, old age homes, by serving in
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institutions individuls
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institutions, individuals
institutions individuals
 can lend a helping hand to the old
debalitated
lacking strength or vigor
debilitated
 ones.
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, by doing
community
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work
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 individuals can certainly shape up their commuting skills.
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,
such
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 types of
virtuos
morally excellent
virtuous
virtues
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 deeds tend to be beneficial for the
community
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, when people become a part of
dynamic labour force
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the dynamic labour force
.
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 could provide them a chance to help serving the
community
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 in the times of natural disasters.
This
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 has been shown to the world by the young medical students of Indonesia who actively participated at the time, when
earth quake
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the earth quake
earthquake
an earth quake
 hit their land by providing ambulatory services to the people.
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, teenagers tend to play a pivotal role in performing
community
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work
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. Admittedly,
unmonetized
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work
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, may it be a job or a
community
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 service, can sometimes become a source of financial setback for the
individulas
a human being
individuals
 as they have to meet their educational expenditures. Despite
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, the advantage of gaining
working
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work
 skills and serving
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community
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the community
 over money makes it an uninspired aspiration. To conclude, it is imperative for students
to do
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do
 free
community
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work
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 for personal as well as for
community
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 gains,
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 they cannot retain enough working skills and promote their
community
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. The onus lies on teens to effectively utilize their free time by helping out the
community
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.
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