SHOULD WEALTHY NATIONS BE REQUIRED TO SHARE THEIR WEALTH AMONG POOR NATIONS BY PROVIDING SUCH THINGS AS FOOD AND EDUCATIONS? OR IS IT RESPONSIBILTY OF THE GOVERNMENT OF POORER NATIONS TO LOOK AFTER THEIR CITIZENS THEMSELVES?

Citizens of undeveloped countries are suffering from underdevelopment and
this
has
necessitate
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necessitated
reasons for wealthy countries to reach out to them in order to mitigate hardship facing
this
poor
countries
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country
. Develop nations must do all in their capability to help downtrodden nations in order to prevent immigration and
also
improve the economic standard of
this nations
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this nation
these nations
. Developed countries should provide help to the less developed nations so as to reduce or stave off immigration because with
increase
hardship, citizens of
this
nations
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nation
will
more likely
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most likely
look for a way out of their predicament and in most cases, migrating to a better society is
cnsider
carefully weighed
considered
consider
by most citizens.
This
is can lead to overpopulation on the wealthy countries and
increase
in in numbers of illegal immigrants.
For example
, France, a
develop
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developing
developed
developmental
nation, send aids on
regular basis
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a regular basis
to some poor French speaking countries with the sole aim of improving their standard and discourage migration of their citizen to their country.
Therefore
,
intervention
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the intervention
of the
well
an architectural partition with a height and length greater than its thickness; used to divide or enclose an area or to support another structure
wall
to
do nations
a voluntary gift (as of money or service or ideas) made to some worthwhile cause
donations
in solving the crisis of the poor nations will keep them in their countries. Involvement of the economical robust
countrie
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
country
counter
leads to improved economic standard of low income countries and as
result
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a result
, there is
increase
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an increase
in employment rate, reduction in crime level and better economic indices and
this
in turn help the citizen of
this
plural of "this"
these
those
poor nations to harness their potential.
For instance
, investments of
united state company
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the united state company
, chevron in exploitation of oil in Nigeria as lead
increase
employment rates and improve
condition
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the condition
of the life of the citizens.
Thus
,
increase
standard
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the standard
of living of less privilege countries create a balance between
develop
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developing
developed
and less developed nations. In conclusion, nationalities of downtrodden countries are suffering from
undervelopment
.
This
essay discussed reasons why
this
nations
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nation
should be
help
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helped
by developed
countries so
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countries, so
as to reduce movement of people to their countries and
also
to improve
economic standard
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the economic standard
.
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