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Some people think that the government wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.

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Introduction
Some people contend that there are many issues that a country must solve
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 before putting more attention to
art
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.
However
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, I personally think that
art
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 is an essential part of a culture so that it is acceptable to allocate budget to preserve and develop
art
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.
Body paragraph 1
Admittedly, there are some justifications by people who become the opponents of
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 spending.
First
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 of all, Most
art
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 projects are expensive with no obvious outcomes that have direct relations to a nation’s income.
For example
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, the monument of Kebangkitan Pahlawan in Malang city that adsorbed for almost 1 billion rupiahs does not attract people to visit and even some residents in Malang do not realize the existence of the monument. Another reason is that
art
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 is not a critical aspect
for
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of
 the sustainability of human’s
life
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. Human’s
life
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 will not disappear just because they have the
life
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 with a less taste of
esthetic
feeling great rapture or delight
ecstatic
.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
still I support the
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I still support the
 government to maintain
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.
Art
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 is part of a culture which becomes the identity of a nation and if the culture is strong enough, eventually it could be a major source of income.
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, Bali is an island in Indonesia, where thousands of visitors come each year to experience the combination of conventional values and modern lifestyles. In
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 island, the government invests more than a
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 of their total budget to maintain their traditional
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.
Body paragraph 3
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,
art
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 makes a better
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. As food, an
art
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 is a supplement for
human’s soul
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the human’s soul
. It has a magnificent power to aid buildings, roads, parks, and everything, with its uniqueness. Just imagine how empty a room is if there is no little painting on the wall.
Art
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 is enhancing people’s
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 by leveraging their experiences and empowering people to possess beautiful imagination.
Conclusion
To sum up, supporting
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 is important for a government as it would enhance the quality of
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 either by improving tourism industry or by providing a better artistic facilities.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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