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In some countries, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

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The major reason for the alienation of the youth in terms of communication with the elderly is the so-called generation gap. As younger generations grow up in a mobile, fast-changing world, they experience
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changes in values and attitudes that do not correlate with the traditional set of mind of their grandparents.
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, they share no common ground to hold a conversation about trivial matters,
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 disconnect comes down to the traumatising past experiences that affected the elderly's mentality.
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, it might be impossible for the
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 to understand neither what it was like to live during the war,watching people die, nor what being on the brink of starvation was like,
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 why when younger ones sit at the table, they can hardly find a topic for discussion, opting for silence or a series of short answers,they might be reproached for afterwards. Learning how to navigate
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 generational divide can go a long way towards easing communication tensions between the generations.
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, a potential solution might be familiarising
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 with the events of the past, trying to live them through. It can be done either through watching documentaries or films of the past years, what is more, the input could be intensified if followed by a Q&A session with a grandparent, who could unpack the truth about war events based on their recollections
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 share the burden.
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 the rift. In
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 case, the communication gap might be bridged because of mutual understanding and shared values.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Elderly
  • Accumulated wisdom
  • Tradition and history
  • Guidance
  • Family life
  • Cultural practices
  • Innovation
  • Technological advancement
  • Economic productivity
  • Adaptable
  • Globalized societies
  • Physical attributes
  • Labor force
  • Economic growth
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