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International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages ?

#travel #countries #doors #tourists #tourism
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In recent times, immigration is less expensive and countries are more accommodating to
tourist
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industry has gro
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The tourist industry
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 producing great advantages in certain areas
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 as economic growth, contribu
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contributing
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 provision. On the one hand ,touris
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provides jobs to local individual, services
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 guide , hotel
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taffs at
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ners who serve tourists at the hotel .These
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b's raise the standard of living of youth in
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ong distant cousin who studied public administration and did not get a
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 after his BSC . A yea
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later, he got a
job
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 as a
tourist
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 guide in the UK and has since been stable and able to cater for himself and family. Other advantages include economic growth via generation of internal Revenue as
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 pay for their trips. These advantages enable travel agencies to be less strict with their policies .
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the other hand
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the loss
ural values as indigene
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an inability to resist the gratification of whims and desires
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 as smoking, alcoholism ,sexual
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ices, indecent dressing from
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who works as a
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 centre got acquainted with a
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, he usually goes to spend time at night discussing over 4-5 bottles of alcohol .
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haviour gradually becomes a habit and he is unknowingly addicted. Generation of waste at
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long run, these
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fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
ractiveness .
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In conclusion, travelin
g to fore
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
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countries, especially
rism has gotten cheaper due to its various benefits which the country benefits from,
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 cost of travelin
g is redu
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
ced.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • local businesses
  • job creation
  • cultural understanding
  • stereotypes
  • global connections
  • infrastructure
  • public transportation
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • deforestation
  • wildlife habitats
  • commercialization
  • cultural identity
  • overcrowding
  • quality of life
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