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Development in technology causes environmental problems. Some people believe the solution to these problems is everyone accepts a simpler way of life, while others say that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is highly inevitable that
technology
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 has shrunk the world and brought it to the size of our palm.It has to
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accept
 that people searching for simpler lives rely completely or mostly on
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technology which
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technology, which
 thereby lead to several complications. Yet
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,
technology
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 has never failed to have a positive impact on today's busy world. Personally
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 I feel
technology
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 has lead to the downfall of the human race indirectly rather than development.
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that which is responsible for one's thoughts and feelings; the seat of the faculty of reason
Mind
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 if we were to consider automation
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 it has nearly stopped people depending on their feet even for
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 distances.
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 has
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 resulted in several cardiovascular diseases in people due to lack of exercise.
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, improvement in automation has
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 increased the rate of pollution of the atmosphere.
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 is evident from the fact that most of the emissions from the vehicles is posing a major threat to the environment in the recent days. Despite the disadvantages, Machineries have developed in a way that it could save manpower
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energy and time. Constant developments have even made Herculean tasks sound a child's play in the hands of
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 can be understood from the state-of-art- technologies in
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automation, which
 has helped reduce distances between places by several thousand miles. It is due to
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these
developments it
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developments, it
 is possible for us to travel to different places with so much of ease and comfort. As a coin has two sides,
technology
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 has both advantages and disadvantages. I would like to conclude saying that improvements in
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are
 most welcome considering the disadvantages. They have to be implemented in practise only when it is needed the most.

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