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Both poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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The Pursuing of tertiary education has become a daunting task for many students irrespective of their financial status.
However
, I completely agree with the statement because of
soaring international student placement
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the soaring international student placement
, and strict admission criteria could be the most viable reason behind
this
 burgeoning fact. To embark with, most universities around the globe have devised tough rules and regulations regarding admissions.
In other words
, students with a strong academic background, and higher percentages in their previous degrees are allowed to get admission, which eventually increased the competition among students by leaps and bounds.
For example
,
recent report
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a recent report
the recent report
 published in the Daily Times revealed that after 2015, monetary status has negligible effect on a student's academic career due to the revised policies of the top-ranked universities. What is more, universities are inviting more students
for
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from
 other countries, to get quality education leaving their deserving students far behind. Fee for international students is double as compared to the local community, so they are prioritized.
In addition
, these students use college accommodation, transports, and other facilities which bring more business to the organization.
For instance
, at the University of California, MBBS degree is offered to national students for $1200 per year, while overseas students paid $2500 per year which makes a huge difference. In conclusion, university officials are neglecting local students, whether they are rich or poor because they accept brilliant students to produce quality education, and increased the quota for students from abroad to get more profit.
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