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Some people believe that children who are given pocket money every week have less problems managing money when they become adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt
pocket
money
 play an important role in juvenile life. Certain people think that weekly
basis
pocket
money
 to teenagers will help them to manage
money
 when they become adults. We will see the impact of
pocket
money
 on
kids whether
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kids, whether
 it should be given on
daily
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a daily
 or after every
week
.
To begin
 with Weekly
basis
pocket
money
, Weekly
basis
pocket
money
 is educating kids to buy desire item in the start of the
week
 and to regulate all
week
 with less
money
,
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,
For example
 One have a strong desire to buy a smart gadget or some sort of computer game, As per the kids normal temperament, he will buy it at the same time and will try to survive in small amount for the rest of the
week
. On
other hand
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the other hand
, one is clutching daily
pocket
money
,
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,
 he will save it for
rest
Suggestion
the rest
 of the
week
 to buy the same gadget or computer games and that will help him to save for a long time while having it
.
Accept space
.
 That’s actually a preparation for future
.
Accept space
.
 When you will be adult
this
 habit grow with you as well to reduce your
expense in
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expense, in
 tough days when
your
Suggestion
you're
 earning is less. To summarize,
Pocket
money
 on daily or weekly
basis
prepare
Suggestion
prepares
 kids to manage their expenses. In my prospective daily
pocket
money
 will educate more as I suppose saving
money
 for weeks to buy something is better rather than to spend all and survive with less for the rest of the
week
.
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