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Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18 years of age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that galleries and historical places must be public for children under the
age
 of 18.
This
 essay agrees with that statement due to the following reasons. During
this
age
, kids do not have enough resources to pay their entrance
for
Suggestion
to
 the museums. Still, they will ask money
for
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from
 their parents to provide their needs. What if the family of that child would not allow him or her to go there. The joy and excitement for that child will be
cease
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ceased
. In the Netherlands, they have a special gallery for children which they can go with off charges. Another important thing to consider,
this
 type of people have more creative minds than
adult
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adults
an adult
. It is necessary for them to have the freedom they want to explore in the museums
.
Accept space
.
 A recent study conducted by Cambridge University, said that ages 7-17 have a wide imagination and
this
 type of
age
 should be given an importance, so that when they reach the adulthood they will have a lot to offer in their chosen career. For these reasons, I strongly believe that special places for museums and galleries are free for children under 18 years of
age
 is an excellent idea.

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