Unpaid Community Service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood, or teaching sports to younger children ) To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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It is often argued that voluntary charity works should be included in co-

curriculur

of or relating to an academic course of study

curricular

curriculum

curricula

activities

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high schools.

However

, many others opine the opposite. I do believe in the notion that voluntary charity works should be made mandatory for school-goers and I will discuss them in

upcoming paragraphs

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the upcoming paragraphs

. Working for a charity should be made mandatory at school level, as it will instill a feeling of helping others.

This

is because the minds of the pupils are still developing and if they help others without thinking of having a barter benefit, it will make them a

good

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better

person in future.

For example

, In a renowned School in Ludhiana, a system of donating ‘One Chapati A Day’ from all the school students is getting famous, as all the students bring a Chapati from their home and

then

give it to the Charity NGO which ultimately feeds the

destitutes

poor enough to need help from others

destitute

in and around the

society

As a result

, younger ones earns good

reputation leading

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reputation, leading

welfare

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the welfare

of the

society

Moreover

, Governments today are working day and night for the development of

society

Accept space

still there are many shortcomings faced by

Government

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the Government

. If the volunteers join hands,

then

the

society

can boon in a much shorter time.

For example

, a famous park in Punjab was about to be built by the Government authorities,

however

, due to shortage of labour

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volunteer NGOs

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which included teen-agers, came front and helped in building the park.

As a result

, People around the area got a new neighbourhood to spend time with each other. Hammering the

last

nail, it can be reiterated that younger ones should be taught to serve for the welfare the

society

at an early age and

this

can be made mandatory at school level so as to make them a better citizen and giving an overall benefit to the

society

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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