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"Some people argue that missing school to take part in climate change protests is beneficial for young people. Others believe that children should remain in school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Although
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 many opine that omitting
school
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 to participate in weather change protest is useful for youngsters, others consider that juvenile ought to be in
school
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. The former view point is quite brave, which certainly will help students to understand global issues at an early stage of their life;
however
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, later
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
 may just limit young one’s thinking up to the classroom only. In my opinion the former argument is
more strong
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stronger
, perhaps more positive in children’s growth. There are merits of participating in weather change protest.
To begin
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 with, it is certainly useful and helps children to understand global issues at
early stage
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an early stage
the early stage
 of their life, and expressing disapproval bravely in front of whole world enables to exploit their knowledge by creating awareness towards mankind. As well as to
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, they will be confident in dealing with different challenging situation,
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 they will not be tensed to solve their own issues.
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, if youngsters are facing any failure in exam or even in
interview
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the interview
an interview
, they might give up easily,
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 many have lost their lives by not able to cope with minor issues. Whereas,
such
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 protests are lifesavers for them and they can work calmly in given situations to solve it
further
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 from available options.
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, keeping students in schools may limit their thinking process up to
classroom
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the classroom
 only,
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 making them more timid and shy,
as a result
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 of
this
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, they will hesitate to put forward their opinion publicly.
For example
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, there are many students, who even shy to make presentations in front of their fellow colleagues and teachers.
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,
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 youngsters may not able to compete with other
school
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 students when there are interschool competitions. In conclusion, on the whole, omitting classes for weather change protest seems more useful in children’s growth and helps them to think out of the box,
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, just keeping students in
schools
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the schools
 will
un able
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UN able
unable
win able
run able
 them to open up publicly. In my opinion, children should explore their knowledge to fullest and should not have any objection in protesting for well being of mankind. While, schools should encourage students by announcing a
school
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 holiday
thus
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, helping them not to miss any classes.
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