In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘’anyone can do it’’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a new generation is beyond our imagination. Some people think that dumb people can get

success

in the arts

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However

, Majesty pupils did not get

success

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In today's era, art is

field

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a field

which is liked everyone because they all want to be glutted. The reality is that real honour not accepted by many people due to lack of

creativity knowledge

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creativity, knowledge

so that it result as a wrong

people

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person

get

opportunity

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the opportunity

to become

celebrity

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a celebrity

celebrities

For instance

: in my country, there are many actors who perform at a small theatre while grand folks get

opportunity

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an opportunity

at a big stage. If we talk about music, there are many platforms which through pupils get

success

because certain platform Directly represent you to the country people's.

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attitude is key of

success

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as we can see that the uneducated people get succeed while there is heavy competition in the field of creativity

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Art is

platform

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a platform

the platform

through which incapable pupils do something so that it is better for the country growth.

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the talented persons can do anything because talent can not hide anywhere

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I totally disagree with the statement because talented generation

get

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gets

an opportunity through anywhere because there is someone whom really had a value of real talent. Nowadays, everyone has

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eyes

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eye

through which they can notice the real talent.

Mon Sep 23 2019

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