In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘’anyone can do it’’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a new generation is beyond our imagination. Some people think that dumb people can get

success

in the arts

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However

, Majesty pupils did not get

success

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In today's era, art is

field

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a field

which is liked everyone because they all want to be glutted. The reality is that real honour not accepted by many people due to lack of

creativity knowledge

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creativity, knowledge

so that it result as a wrong

people

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person

get

opportunity

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the opportunity

to become

celebrity

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a celebrity

celebrities

For instance

: in my country, there are many actors who perform at a small theatre while grand folks get

opportunity

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an opportunity

at a big stage. If we talk about music, there are many platforms which through pupils get

success

because certain platform Directly represent you to the country people's.

Secondly

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attitude is key of

success

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as we can see that the uneducated people get succeed while there is heavy competition in the field of creativity

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Art is

platform

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a platform

the platform

through which incapable pupils do something so that it is better for the country growth.

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the talented persons can do anything because talent can not hide anywhere

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I totally disagree with the statement because talented generation

get

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gets

an opportunity through anywhere because there is someone whom really had a value of real talent. Nowadays, everyone has

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eyes

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eye

through which they can notice the real talent.

Mon Sep 23 2019

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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘’anyone can do it’’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people say that we must send our parents to old age home when they reach 60. However other think that they must be taken care at home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.