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In many places, new homes are needed , but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people beleive it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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Many individuals are of the opinion that the integrity of the
countryside
 should be maintained, thereby leaving it undeveloped. Other individuals,
on the other hand
, feel houses should be built where ever there is available land. While I understand the importance of maintaining the structure of
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
; I think housing should be of uttermost importance and
therefore
, should not be at the expense of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
.......
Accept space
.......
 There are many reasons why I take
this
 stand.
First
, the structure of the
countryside
 can be preserved using other means. These
includes
Suggestion
include
 maintaining the original structure of the city landscape.
Also
, structures and buildings important to the history of the city should be kept clean and tidy for tourists. All these, in my view, will protect the
countryside
 of unintended civilisation without unnecessarily denying citizens of
accoodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
.
Second
, building houses in an area of interest is not what really exposes the place to civilisation. I think other factors like migration of industries and air pollution associated with it brings about a more damaging effect than providing accomodation for indigent
indigenes
originating where it is found
indigenous
indigence
. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think accomodation can be provided for individuals in need in the
countryside
 without damaging the integrity of the
countryside
.
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