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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar charts enumerate the
number
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 of
Catholics
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 who live in different nations in 2010 and 2013. The States taken into account are:
China
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,
India
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, Philippines, Vietnam, Korea and Japan.
According to
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 the graph, amongst the 6
countries
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 three of them had a raise of numbers in 2013 compared to 2010:
China
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,
India
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 and Japan. For the other 3
countries
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 the
number
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 of
Catholics
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 is lower in 2013 than in 2010. On one hand, the country with the highest
number
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 of
Catholics
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 is Philippines by far. The specific nation in 2010 had over 75
million
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 of Catholic believers and in 2013 72
million
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.
On the other hand
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 Japan is the country with the lowest
number
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: 400,000 in 2010 and 509,000 in 2013. Regarding the other four
countries
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,
China
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 and
India
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 in 2010 had more or less the same
number
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 of
Catholics
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, between 9 and 10
million
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.
Although
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 in 2013 the difference is bigger,
India
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 had 19
million
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 and
China
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 15
million
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. The situation is similar for Vietnam and Korea, in 2010 both
countries
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 had around 5
million
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 of believers,
while
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 in 2013 Vietnam remained roughly with the same
number
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.
On the contrary
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 Korea lost around 4
million
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 of
Catholics
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 in 2013. Some
companies
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sponsor
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sports
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 as a way to advertise themselves. Some
people
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 think it is good,
while
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 others think there are disadvantages to
this
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. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. I strongly believe that for a
company
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 to
sponsor
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 specific
sports
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 in order to advertise themselves is definitely a good move. Some of the most famous advertising campaign are linked to
sports
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.
In addition
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, some
companies
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 have based their entire success on relating themselves to certain
sports
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 e.g. the energy drink Redbull sponsored all kind of extreme
sports
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. Some
people
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 might think for some reasons that a
company
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 should avoid sponsoring
sports
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. Maybe it is because some think that certain
companies
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 should remain an elite and linking themselves to
sports
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 mean to tarnish their images. Even more, some
people
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 might believe that it could turn into a bad investment since
companies
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 need to take big financial risks with huge investments to
sponsor
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 certain
sports
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.
Therefore
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,
according to
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 some it is better not to
sponsor
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 a
sport
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 at all. In my personal view,
companies
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 should
sponsor
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sports
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 if they have the possibility to do so. It is not important whether the
company
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 produces sportswear e.g. Rolex with the most famous tennis player Roger Federer or the
company
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 AON with the football team Manchester United. Every fan of the specific
sport
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 makes the immediate link with a
sport
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 player or a team and a brand. By sponsoring a
sport
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,
companies
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 have the possibility to show their brand to millions of
people
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 worldwide and often
this
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 tactic has a huge return in sales.
To conclude
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, I strongly disagree with those who are contrary to the idea of
companies
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sponsor
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 a
sport
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. Millions of
people
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 watch different
sports
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 every single day and unconsciously a lot of them are hooked by some sponsors even if they do not realize it immediately.
People
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 love
sports
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 and they will keep watching them,
therefore
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 it is a great way for a
company
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sponsor
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 a
sport
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 to advertise itself.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, therefore, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the tenth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, catholics, china, india, countries, million, companies, sponsor, sports, people, company, sport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the tenth paragraph.
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